Title: Breathless (Less is More #1)
Author: J.M. Lamp
Publisher: Self Published
Release Date: May 19, 2017
Page Count: 160
Reviewed by: Kristin
Heat Level: 4 flames out of 5
Rating: 3.5 stars out of 5
After Elliot Edwards goes on yet another terrible double date for his best friend, he finds himself at his favorite park bench by the water like he does most nights. Only this night is different. He doesn’t expect a random stranger named Will Everett to sit down next to him and change his life forever.
But Will has a secret; a secret filled with heartbreak and sorrow and Elliot may be the only one able to repair what’s been broken in ways neither of them would ever have imagined possible.
Premise of the book is Will and Elliot are both lonely and single. Will takes a chance and sits down next to Elliot on a park bench and they strike up a conversation that leads to mutual interest. Over the course of several months, the two come to find they support and compliment each other in ways they never thought possible.
This is a sweet, low-angst, no big misunderstanding read. Boy meets boy, boy dates boy, boy and boy have lots of hearts to hearts (and some steamy sex), boys have hearts to heart with friends, and eventually fall in love. It’s a bowl of comforting vanilla ice cream with fresh picked summer strawberries and whippy cream.
I liked the added realism to this story – Elliot falling asleep during a blow job, Will not telling Elliot that he was engaged; these are little things that yeah, couples do or don’t do as the case may be. You can live with someone for 10, 20, 30+ years and not know everything about them.
The scene where Will flies out of the apartment – basically blowing Elliot off – when he gets a phone call that Lydia and Abbey are in the hospital, yeah, realism! When someone is suffering from PTSD or trauma, they aren’t thinking straight. That it took one of Elliot’s friends to point this out, was a bit of a duh. Realism.
There were a few things that detracted from the overall story for me:
Too many people cracking their necks. I can see it as a character tag for ONE person, but just about every character cracked their neck at least once, and sometime two characters in the same scene. Urk!
Numerous grammatical and spelling errors that I am assuming (hoping) will be caught before the final “print”. I had an urge to pull out the red pen – which does no good on an e-reader – but the urge was there.
The author also alternates chapters between Will and Elliot’s POV – some attention is necessary to remember to see who’s chapter is on deck. That being noted, I would have liked the author to have indicated more frequently just who was the POV was during longer dialog scenes. More than once I had to back track and then count forward “Will”, “Elliot”, “Will”, “Elliot”… to figure out exactly who was speaking. It became a bit confusing.
I didn’t care for the nearly carbon copy set of friends – Will had Lydia, his sister and bestie. Elliot had Hadley, his friend and bestie. Both gals knew the sordid details of their sex lives, both gals were pushing Will/Elliot to date again “for their own good”, both gals demanded to meet and greet to decide if Will/Ethan was good boyfriend material, both gals (are you getting the idea?) then expressed concern Will/Ethan were moving too quickly in the relationship – personally, I would have liked to have had one less gal and less meddling into their sex lives. Some things should remain private, ya know?
My issues aside, I still found this an enjoyable story that I seriously would curl up and read with a bowl of ice cream and strawberries.